Beginnings - dAmnU contest

The introductory words by themselves-- "It came with the trembling of fingers"-- sets a haunting tone of reminiscence, and from that point on the reader is taken on a journey (if you'll pardon the monstrously cliche phrase) backward in time. This piece, chronicling the poet's years on deviantART, is a wrenching piece of work, and I'm glad to have read it.

One phrase especially sticks out to me: 'from the freezing depths of midnight teens'. That is quite a brilliant bit of diction there, Miss Elly.

As far as any issues I have with the writing, I don't particularly like it when a poet begins pretty much every line with a capital letter; it seems to interrupt the poem. That might, however, be the way that I read things (since in my own poetry I pretty much do away with capitalization altogether).

I think, too, that there are places in the poem where articles were used that weren't necessary, e.g. "Wanting/the desire" -- I don't feel like the "the" was necessary there.

There's an overuse of commas in the piece as well-- I would suggest you experiment with other forms of punctuation or with using none at all in places.

Another thing that I really like about this poem is that it begins with such a haunted tone and ends with hope. Sounds like I'm being a total sap, but I find it to be a nice contrast.

I like the subscripted words; they seem to echo in one's mind as the poem continues.